Lab 10

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I learned by research that there is no perfect sanitation system in the world. We are humans and any action we do creates consequences, unintended or not. But if any can come close to the ideal, I think it can be found in Japan. Ada is one of the 13 million inhabitants of Tokyo, the largest city in the world. The cultures and values in Japan is different, she says, people pay particular attention to cleanliness. People respect their sanitary officers and kids are trained at a young age to keep their surroundings tidy and neat. Visitors to Japan would be impressed with the country’s particular attention to detail in everything, especially with their public washrooms. I remember being befuddled in Busan, South Korea, as I stayed in a beautiful loft apartment owned by a Japanese man using the popular website AirBnB. He had the Toto washlet installed in all the bathrooms, it looked like it had more computing powers than my pithy little Samsung phone.

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Ada is one of the 13 million inhabitants of Tokyo, the largest city in the world. The cultures and values in Japan is different, she says, people pay particular attention to cleanliness. Sanitation maintenance workers are accorded the respect they deserve. Japanese kids are trained at a young age to keep their surroundings tidy and neat. Their mentality towards modernity translates in how they manage to innovate the way people pooped for centuries.

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The prudish sentiments people may have that prevents them from discussing about poop in a critical manner, or their reluctance to change, hinders progress. Perhaps, it is because of cost, Toto washlets- with the heated seats and blowdryers, that completely eliminate the need for toilet paper to pat-dry, can be bought in US and Canada at a steep 600$. For most people, hacking their bathrooms to be greener is not feasible. But it can be done, and that change starts with being curious and open about how the rest of the world does their business.

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People have prudish sentiments that prevents them from discussing poop in a critical manner, but this reluctance to change, hinders progress. Toto washlets- with the heated seats and blowdryers, that completely eliminate the need for toilet paper to pat-dry, can be bought in US and Canada at a steep 600$. For most people, hacking their bathrooms to be greener is not feasible. But it can be done, and that change starts with being curious and open about how the rest of the world does their business.

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